It’s Emma here from the Summer Learning Journey.
What an awesome shape poem you have created. A brilliant idea to put it inside the raindrop. I love the description of the raindrop shimmering in the freezing air. I can just imagine a cold winters day where the droplets are like ice! I also enjoy your use of alliteration to describe the raindrop hitting the ground in splashing big splats! It’s describes exactly what its like when raindrops hit the floor in big puddles. Did you enjoy writing this poem? I wonder if you could do something similar with snowflakes for Christmas! Thank you for sharing Isa.
Thank you for the comment. Yes I did enjoy writing the poem. I could also try something similar for Christmas.
Awesome, feel free to share it if you do, I would love to read it!
Kia ora Isa. Phil from the Poetry Slam team here. Ioved your poem. It reminded me of a riddle and of the Kennings poems we looked at in last year’s Poetry Slam. I’m excited to watch your performance of your poem but you’ll just need to change the permissions on your video so that we can see it. Here’s a how to video.
Oops, I forgot to share it. It should work now. Thank you for reminding me.
Hi Isa this poem was the first thing I listened to this morning and it was a great choice. I like the way that you have really stuck within the shape and the little bit of mystery waiting for the final line. It does make a difference when you record yourself saying the poem like you have. I look forward to hearing more of your poems. Dave from the Poetry Slam
Hello Isa, My name is neha from hay park school . Amazing poem! I love what you chose for your shape poem! The poem shape i did was a blue whale. I love the line i reflect as a flat puddle that my favourite part. Anyways great job.
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